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raynedanserwrites ([personal profile] raynedanserwrites) wrote2008-05-19 12:37 pm
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Fic - Shelter - A Second Look

450 words of Shaun and Gabe

Shaun walked slowly back into the noisy, well lit house. Behind him, he could hear Zach as he ground through the gears of his Blazer, a sure sign he was upset. Shaun closed the door and went to the kitchen to find a beer. He kept walking through the house, painfully aware that Gabe was hot on his heels as he climbed the stairs slowly. He dragged his hand lightly along the iron railing, trying not to remember that first night not so long ago.

His room was quieter than downstairs had been, but even with the door closed, he could still hear the noise. He sat on his bed and took a long pull off the beer bottle before placing it carefully on the floor.

“Not now, Gabe,” he growled as he flopped back onto his unmade bed. Gabe stood, arms crossed over his chest, eyes wary, watchful. Seeing so much more than Shaun wanted him to see.

When the bed gave a little under Gabe's weight as he sat down at the foot, Shaun winced, waiting for one of Gabe's smart ass comments. What came out instead surprised him.

“He got you good, huh?” Gabe asked quietly, any trace of the wise ass that Shaun had come to expect gone.

Shaun sat up and picked his beer up from the floor. He didn't drink it, but picked at the paper label. Somehow, it was easier not to answer Gabe just then. He looked up and scowled when Gabe toed the bottom of his foot with his own.

“Dude. What happened?” Gabe pressed.

Shaun flicked a bit of paper. “Zach happened,” he finally admitted.

“You do love him.”

“It doesn't matter now,” Shaun answered after a long moment. “It's over.” When Gabe didn't say anything, just made a rude noise, Shaun looked at him sharply. “What?” he demanded.

Gabe leaned back on his elbows and watched his older brother. “It doesn't look over from where I'm sitting. I could talk to him, you know.”

“Jesus. Gabe. No.”

“Shaun. Yes.” Decision made, Gabe got up and made for Shaun's door. “I'm talking to him. You guys need to fix this. Just Shaun?”

Shaun looked up from the beer bottle he was still picking naked. “What?”

“No more secrets, yeah?” Gabe said just before the door closed.

Shaun couldn't help but smile at that. At Gabe's easy acceptance of what was and what may be. At how he'd read him like a book and knew when to push and when to back off. People were always taking Gabe at face value – the tits and ass party guy, but there were moments when intelligence won out. This was one of those moments.

[identity profile] vidonia.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 07:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay for Shelter fic! Nice work:)

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 07:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks! There's more, erm, percolating. ;-)

We have Fic!

[identity profile] true-enough.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 10:54 pm (UTC)(link)


Very nicely done! This is exactly the kind of scene I'd love to insert in the film with Shaun and Gabe being brothers and Gabe pleasantly surprising everyone.

Re: We have Fic!

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 11:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I was SO nervous about writing them, so I'm glad you liked it.

I just... I don't see Gabe being all party boy over something like this - it's his brother and his best friend, after all. I also don't see them having this HUGE deep conversation when (at the very least) Gabe is most likely 3 sheets to the wind and Shaun has just been trampled on.

Um. Would this be a good time to mention I'm working on more? *facepalm* Damn boys. They're eating my brain (or what's left of it).

[identity profile] kamadu.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 11:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Woo for fic! and most wonderful it is too. Perfect Gabe getting right to the point and then taking matters into his own hands. All while three sheets to the wind. I'm surprised he even remembers his own name the next day :) I so need a Gabe icon.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-19 11:53 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm working on snagging caps so I can attempt an icon post (with a new program EEP!) soon. :D *facepalm* I lied. I have icons. :D

I was trying to work in a spot about "I'm too trashed to have this conversation" or something, but couldn't figure out where it could fit in..... so left it out. lol
Edited 2008-05-20 16:28 (UTC)

[identity profile] delibby.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 05:09 am (UTC)(link)
Shelter! I adore that movie. So sweet.

I've got my dvd on order from Amazon along with Dante's Cove S3. Should get them in early June.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 11:09 am (UTC)(link)
It's eating my BRAIN!!!!!! Like so much that it's ridiculous. *headdesk*

I need to order this. I have the movie, but it's a burned DVD. ;-)

[identity profile] delibby.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 04:16 pm (UTC)(link)
When I ordered, it was like $12.99 at Amazon.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 04:26 pm (UTC)(link)
It's gonna be a couple of weeks or so until I can order it - plus I'm still saving up the nickels and dimes for the wee machine. ;-)

[identity profile] kamadu.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 11:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Gorgeous icons! Thanks for the heads up :)

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-20 11:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks and welcome! :D

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-21 11:46 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! This was intended to take place right after the scene in the movie when Zach kicks Shaun out of his blazer that night at the party.... :D

There is more, but more like unseen snippets that didn't make it into the movie, etc.

[identity profile] rosiet.livejournal.com 2008-05-21 03:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh I really liked this! Thank you for it... I think Gabe was a wonderful character, he had a lot more going on in him than at first seemed.

Rosie
x

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-21 03:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!!! I quite adored Gabe, so yes. Any excuse to play with him. ;-)

[identity profile] snowmore.livejournal.com 2008-05-24 12:14 am (UTC)(link)
A lovely little gap filler. I liked Gabe. Party guy, yeah, but good-hearted who only wanted his friend and his brother happy, even if it meant his friend was a bit different than he thought he was. :)

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-24 12:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I'm having far too much fun playing with them. Like... Enough it kind of scares me. lol :D
ext_8630: guh, ink + skin = ded (commemerative iconage to celebrate my sp)

[identity profile] bellamyrose.livejournal.com 2008-05-26 05:41 am (UTC)(link)
This is just wonderful. I can see the conversation actually happen. *feeds bunnies*

*begs prettily* More Shelter fic soon, please?

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-05-26 11:02 am (UTC)(link)
Oh baby, I'm working on it! :D

[identity profile] kadymae.livejournal.com 2008-06-02 04:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Here by way of the link that De posted.

What I like best about this story is how you show that Gabe and Shaun are so brotherly. We only got a few snippits of them together on screen and this feels like a deleted scene in the movie.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-06-02 04:40 pm (UTC)(link)
*beams* Thank you so much!!! That's what I was trying for, so I'm glad it worked.

There's more at the link she posted. I hope you enjoy it! :D

Fab!

[identity profile] yazrahro.livejournal.com 2008-06-09 02:43 pm (UTC)(link)
That was great, so cute!

Thought Gabe was great in the movie, its nice to see him in the fic.

Thank you very much for this.

Re: Fab!

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-06-09 02:47 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!!! Gabe was very much underused in the movie, IMHO and I have more plans to use him in more fic. ;-)

I'm glad you liked it.
spikedluv: (shelter: zachshaun_firstkiss_true-enough)

[personal profile] spikedluv 2008-06-12 11:18 pm (UTC)(link)
I wondered how this conversation might have gone! Love your observation about Gabe at the end. Thanks for sharing that. *g*

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-06-13 12:04 am (UTC)(link)
I can just see this going so many different ways, but mostly, I truly do think Gabe would surprise us. ;-)

[identity profile] fansprez.livejournal.com 2008-06-16 11:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Awwww. This was one of the very few flaws in the movie. There really should have been a scene where Shaun and Gabe have the "I love your best friend" talk. But I'm really glad you chose to write it. :) Nice job sweetie.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-06-18 02:59 pm (UTC)(link)
I guess they'd originally had something, but then didn't use it, but I think Gabe had it figured out before hand, anyway. :D

[identity profile] pixeestyx.livejournal.com 2008-06-21 11:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Gabe has... so many undiscovered layers. I find myself wanting to play with him more. *g*

[identity profile] jess-d-10.livejournal.com 2008-07-07 09:17 pm (UTC)(link)
This is just right. Not too long, not too short; not too much is said, but not too little also. You captured the moment, you captured these characters.

[identity profile] raynedanser.livejournal.com 2008-07-07 09:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it.

[identity profile] kari-hermione.livejournal.com 2009-11-24 04:22 am (UTC)(link)
I really like this little look into not only Gabe but also Gabe and Shaun's relationship as brothers. I also like that Gabe decides to go and talk to Zack and won't let Shaun stop him. Thanks!

[identity profile] pixeestyx.livejournal.com 2009-11-24 01:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks hon! I'm so glad that you liked it!